The Etorshi Mystery

[Paigethecutest]

Hier is ie dan:

Please note that this is not an official story.

This story takes place between the fourth and fifth season.

Chapter One

“Paige, we have demon-business to do, you can’t go now!” Piper said angrily. “What is it that you need to do? Is it more important than making the world demon-free?”<br>“When I said I didn’t want to give up being a witch, I didn’t mean I was willing to give up a -somewhat- normal life! Since we fulfilled our destiny, we can take it a little easier, can’t we? I mean, vanquishing demons still isn’t my favourite thing to do, you know.” Paige walked out the door. Some Orbs appeared. “Leo, as a Whitelighter you shouldn’t choose sides. Why can’t you just let me go to work? My boss thinks I can’t come late anymore, or else I risk my job, and then we get to give up more things because of a lack of money!”<br>“Problems? An unfamiliar man asked. It appears that the Orbs weren’t Leo’s but his. “Phoebe?” He asked. “No wait, Paige, I heard that you dyed your hair. I think it’s nice. Black was nicer though,” he said. “Who are you?” Paige asked him suspicious. “Oh, yeah, sorry, Keir Sives, I need your help, can I come in? Some demons are following me.”<br>“How do you know who I am, and why do you think I can help you? You’re not some sort of stalker, are you?”<br>“If I was a stalker, I wouldn’t orb here, would I?”<br>“You have a point there, I must admit. Well, come in and tell us your problem. Piper! You were right, we do have demon-business. I’ll call my boss and tell him I’m sick. Again.”<br>
“So, here’s a cup of tea, can you tell us now what’s going on?” Piper asked Keir. “When Phoebe arrives, that way I can tell you the story at one time in stead of many.”<br>“Didn’t you say that you were being followed?” Paige asked him. “Yeah, but I’m sure Piper can blow them up, they’re low-level-demons, no problem for the Charmed Ones, or am I mistaken?”<br> “I’m still anxious to hear how you know who we are.” Paige asked in her turn. “Well,” Keir said, “ you are the Charmed Ones, you know, the most famous witches of all time, and that is something to be proud of. You are not only well know ‘down there’ but also ‘down here’.”<br>Phoebe walked in the room. “What is it, Elise is angry that I am going away again, she thinks that ‘family-business’ has to end. And so do I, I risk my job, you know, It has better to be important. Oh, if it not important, it certainly is cute,” she said while looking at Keir. “Who’s that cute guy,” she asked Piper and Paige. “I’m Keir, and you are Phoebe, aren’t you?” At that moment two scary looking demons shimmered into the room. “Give the Whitelighter to us, and nothing will happen to you,” one of them said in a deep booming voice. “Technically, I’m not a Whitelighter,” Keir said as he blew up the other one. In the same moment Keir blew up the demon that was about to send to the man to the afterlife with an energy-ball.
“Why do you need us, if you can handle it yourself?” Paige asked. “Hey, don’t blame me, when I fled them, they were with a lot more of them. Two I can handle, twenty is an other situation.” That was not what Paige expected to hear. “So, if I’m getting this straight, you just lured twenty demons with evil intentions to us, we could have been killed, you see, it’s not that we don’t wanna help you, it’s just that I want to keep the little bit of life I have.”
Phoebe didn’t want to spoil a lot of time -her job was at stake-, so she cut the fight: “Could anybody tell me what’s going on?”<br>“Yeah, I want to hear your story now too,” Paige said, “what is the problem?”<br>“In short: power struggle in the Underworld, I guess.” Keir began.

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Chapter Two
“I’ll begin at the beginning. A while ago I had some problems with my powers -my powers too are tied to my emotions-, so I asked my Whitelighter what I should do about it. She told me to go to an ancient Centaur tribe to seek in the deepest of my being. I thought it was a good idea, so I went. There, after I discovered what was wrong with my emotions, my Whitelighter appeared telling me to leave the place as quickly as possible. Some demons appeared and after a massacre all the Centaurs and very little demons were dead. My Whitelighter and I fought for a long while but the horde of demons was too large for us, so we fled. Later, after checking with the Elders, I found out that the Centaurs were guarding an artefact called ‘the Etorshi’, a stone with a lot of magical power. We figured that an upper-level demon sent his minions after the stone.
When we went to the place where the massacre took place, we found a half dead demon, who was not very willing to talk. After some threatening and a few blown of body parts, that changed. He told us where we could find his master. We went there and stole the stone, but there was a meeting going on between the upper-level demon and some Darklighters, who killed the only person I ever had, my Whitelighter. And now I’m here.”<br>“I’m so sorry for you,” Paige said, “but, where is the stone now?”<br>“Oh, it’s well protected, “ Keir said, “I swallowed it.”<br>“Oh, that’s just.…”
“Well, Piper, it was indeed a difficult job, the stone was too large. Anyway, I’ll keep the details for myself. But before I swallowed it, I cast a spell on it, so nobody can get it out but me.”<br>“Ok, enough time wasted, Paige, go up to the attic with Keir and look in the Book of Shadows for the demon who’s after the stone, Phoebe, go back to work to save your job, and I’ll make some strong vanquishing potions to save our butts.”<br>
“So, tell me, why did the demons think you were a Whitelighter? I mean there are some things around you that remain unclear,” Paige asked Keir curious.
“Well, I told you that I didn’t have anyone but my Whitelighter, that’s because my Mom, a witch and my Dad, a Whitelighter died and when my Whitelighter was there to pick me up, I followed her and she taught me everything I know about Magic. So, actually, I’m like you, Paige, half witch, half Whitelighter.”<br>“And I always thought that I was unique.”<br>“You are, Paige, you are a Charmed One, and you are one of the fastest-learning persons I know, and that means something, cause I have known a lot of magic-students. Thereby, you’re the loveliest person I know.”<br>“You’re flattering me.……., keep going.”<br>Keir laughed. “That way we spoil more time and time is precious at the moment, we have demons to vanquish. “<br>
“Etorshi,” Paige called. Nothing happened. “That’s one hell of a spell you cast,” Piper said, “if even a Charmed One can’t get the stone out of you.”
“Etorshi,” Keir said on his turn. The stone appeared in his hand. “Well, if I were a demon, I would just kill you to get the stone,” Piper told him, to what he told her: “That way the stone will be orbed away to the Elders, not that that’s the safest place, but the best I could think of. Yeah, I know how to keep something protected.”<br>A demon shimmered into the room, grabbed the stone and fled. “What were you saying?” Piper asked Keir, “protecting the stone?”<br>“No worries, that demon isn’t going to give the stone to it’s master, the power of the stone will consume him before he can get there.”<br>“How can you be sure?” Paige asked.
“You forget I have had it in me for some time, I felt it, but we must get it back to destroy the stone before it gets into powerful hands.”

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Chapter Three
It has been more than a month since Keir lost the stone to a demon. Since then, a lot of demons were consumed by it and got themselves killed. The stone was still lost.

“That’s the tenth demon that captured the stone. Don’t you think it’s about time that we get it in our hands again?” Phoebe asked. “I can’t do anymore then you three. You are the Charmed Ones, why would I have more power?”<br>“It’s your fault that the stone is still lost, you shouldn’t have let it got captured!”<br>“Phoebe, I think he’s right, it all happened so quick,” Paige told her sister.
“Oh, you always choose the side of your boyfriend. Why don’t you just think and choose the side of your sisters.” Phoebe shouted.
Paige, on her turn shouted to her sister: “It’s always me who chooses the side of her boyfriend? I remember that when I thought of Cole to be a demon, you chose his side without thinking!”<br>“Girls,” Keir interrupted,” let’s get going, the stone must be get back to us. Paige, what if we went scrying for it and Phoebe and Piper work on more spells and potions?”<br>
The stone was found again. Now the sisters and Keir had only to figure out how to destroy it.
“Let’s got some sleep first.”<br>“Good idea, Paige,” Piper told her, “I’m so tiered, I could fall to sleep right here.”<br>Piper went up, Phoebe following her. “Phoebe, don’t get so angry with Paige, you know how it is to be in love.” Phoebe reacted: “Yeah, sorry, it’s just that I miss it so, that wonderful feeling.”<br>“Get some sleep, tomorrow there is an other day again, goodnight.”<br>“Goodnight, Piper.”<br>
“Why don’t you just leave the couch for what it is and come sleep with me at my room?” Paige asked Keir seductive. “Why not?” Keir answered her.
They too got upstairs.

The following morning Keir woke up holding Paige in his arms. Oh, last night was beautiful, and so was -and still is- the girl he was with. That feeling he had now was a feeling he didn’t had for a long time, not since his former girlfriend was killed at a robbery -she was an innocent-. Since that day he was afraid of falling in love again. He thought it best not to fall in love with Paige, because of the fact that her live was continually in danger, and he knew he couldn’t survive the death of his beloved one once more. But he couldn’t resist Paige’ magical powers. Not her witch powers, but her feminine ones, they too were able to cast a spell on a person. Keir got out of his -or actually her- bed, he didn’t want to wake Paige and therefore he went quietly to the bathroom were he took a nice shower. He went up to the attic to look for any new information in the Book; it was, after all, a magical book, perhaps someone added anything that could be useful. Nothing was found by him and he went down for breakfast.

A demon appeared in the kitchen to set a trap for Keir, he knew he was coming because he had the power of premonitions, stolen from a witch. He put some dark orbs on the floor, waiting for Keir to come in. When he did, the demon put another orb on the ground, making a circle in which Keir was trapped, a same kind of circle that witches make with crystals. “What the…” Keir said surprised. “Oh, it’s you. Don’t you ever understand? You will not get the stone from me. By the way, you can’t even defeat me, I’m more powerful than you will ever be.” The demon laughed: “More powerful than me? You can’t even break the circle I captured you in.” Keir then concentrated and blew up three of the five orbs in one blow. “Then I shall kill you,” the demon said, but fear was clearly in his voice. “I shall never battle you to the death, and you know it.” Keir said in his turn. “That only makes you weak, my son,” the demon said while Paige stormed in the room. “I am not your son,” Keir shouted with tears in his eyes, he felt he couldn’t control his emotions and warned Paige to leave the kitchen. “Why,” she asked him. “Just do it,” Keir said with worries in his voice. Paige thought no longer and dived away, just in time because a wave of fire came from Keir, setting the whole kitchen on fire. The demon didn’t stand there anymore; he’d had the intelligence to flee. “Man, what was that, I mean, how were you able to use that power?” Paige asked Keir while she wondered how it was possible that all the fire didn’t even scratched the kitchen. “I weren’t, the power used me, now that I again have the Etorshi in me, I got all the powers that the demons had, and they have even grew more powerful because of the stone.” Paige, on her turn said: “Man, it really is important that we destroy it as soon as possible. By the way, why did he call you his son?”<br>“Because I technically am,” was the unexpected answer. “But why did you just say you weren’t?”<br>“Well, remember that I told you my father was a Whitelighter, well, that was him, but when he was very young he let him seduce by evil. When he met my mother he fell in love with her, but he was evil and this love was driving him crazy. And then, he raped my mother. At first I didn’t want to tell you this, but now that you found out…”
“I’m so sorry, I shouldn’t have asked, ”Paige said with pity for him”<br>“Don’t be,” he told her, “you couldn’t know what you know now.”<br>

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Chapter Four
Months had passed and Keir had no more of those painful moments, he learned to control the powers once again. His father hadn’t showed up since his near-death experience. Phoebe had found a spell in an old book from the library to destroy the Etorshi stone. But the spell required a lot of power. More power than the Charmed Ones have, even with Keir in their middle. So they had to find a person with a lot of power who was willing to help them. “Why don’t we ask your mother, Keir?” Piper asked. “Because my father killed her shortly after I was born, he wanted to raise me as a force of darkness. But he couldn’t because of an Elder who saved me from him. I’m sorry for my lies to you about my past, it’s just, I feel a kind of ashamed of it.” Keir answered Piper’s question. “Than I don’t know a person able to help us,” Phoebe worried. “I have one idea,” Keir said with fear. “We’ll destroy the stone while it’s still in me. That way I have a lot of power, so that might work.” Paige answered him: “No, we won’t. That way the stone will destroy along with it. We have to find an other way!”
“There isn’t. It’s the only solution for saving the world from a way to powerful artefact. Please, Paige, help me do this, if I don’t I’ll feel always guilty about the destruction of the world, because that is to what the stone leads. Please?”<br>“Ok, I’ll help you.”<br>“But I’ll stop you,” Keir’s father said as he orbed into the room.
“No,” Keir shouted, this time I’ll do what’s best without you holding me up. You shouldn’t have come here.”<br>A large pillar of light came over Keir. He concentrated. “Girls, get down.”<br>The Charmed Ones did as they where told. An incredibly loud sound came from nowhere. One moment later Keir’s father was nothing more than some dust. “Sorry I couldn’t save you, father,” Keir said with grief. He helped the Charmed Ones up. He held all three by their hands, orbed the old library book before his face, kissed Paige for a brief but very emotional moment and then he said the spell:
Powers that made the earth for what it is,
Help me restore it once again,
So that the power of good will never miss,
And the world’s function now doesn’t end.
A powerful shock went through Piper, Phoebe, Paige and finally Keir. He kissed Paige for the last time and vanished from the face of the earth taking the stone with him. Paige fell on the ground, crying. Her sisters helped her up and tried to stop the tears. Paige told them it’s no use and went to her room where she stayed for more than a week.

[Liz]

wauw! goed verhaal yoh!
wel een beetje een zielig eind

twas idd wel lang maar ik keb het met plezier gelezen

[Paigethecutest]

Dank je. Ik hoop dat de rest ook zo enthousiast is.

[Liz]

Paigethecutest said:

Dank je. Ik hoop dat de rest ook zo enthausiast is.

vast wel
tis gwoon echt heel goed

[Paigethecutest]

Liz said:

vast wel
tis gwoon echt heel goed

Ik vind het echt leuk dat je zo enthousiast bent,

[Bernadet]

Wow.. egt een heel erg goed verhaal..! ;D
Wel een heel erg zielig einde..!
Maar egt top verhaal..!

[Liz]

Bernadet said:

Wow.. egt een heel erg goed verhaal..! ;D
Wel een heel erg zielig einde..!
Maar egt top verhaal..!

haha zie ...nog zo'n enthousiast iemand

[Mariet]

Tja sorry, kan de helft dus niet lezen Maar wat ik kan lezen is erg goed! jemig k zou daar echt geen geduld voor hebben om alles in het engels te schrijven ;D

[Paigethecutest]

Hoezo kan je de helft niet lezen, vanwege het Engels?
Het kost idd veel tijd om het in het Engels te doen, maar ik heb geen 1 keer een woordenboek gebruikt, dat kost natuurlijk nog meer tijd, dan moet je veel zinnen omvormen zodat je wel kan schrijven wat je wilt.

[Mariet]

Paigethecutest said:

Hoezo kan je de helft niet lezen, vanwege het Engels?
Het kost idd veel tijd om het in het Engels te doen, maar ik heb geen 1 keer een woordenboek gebruikt, dat kost natuurlijk nog meer tijd, dan moet je veel zinnen omvormen zodat je wel kan schrijven wat je wilt.

Yep vanwege het engels.. ben er gewoon zo slecht in (naja het lezen dan want verstaan kan ik wel super..). Heb daardoor ook vaak een onvoldoende voor een PW maar agh..

[Paigethecutest]

Jammer, ja, zelf vind ik Engels mooier, het heeft gewoon iets. Als ik weer een verhaal ga schrijven (wat ik niet snel van plan ben) zal ik overwegen om het in het Nederlands te schrijven.

[Mariet]

Paigethecutest said:

Jammer, ja, zelf vind ik Engels mooier, het heeft gewoon iets. Als ik weer een verhaal ga schrijven (wat ik niet snel van plan ben) zal ik overwegen om het in het Nederlands te schrijven.

Hihi dat hoef je voor mij niet te doen hoor ;D

Vind engels ook veel gaver haha..

Alleen het is met lezen altijd zo dat je met worden die je niet weet kan je niet zo makellijk achter de zin komen (vind ik dan) en met ernaar luisteren vind ik dat je dat wel beter kan..

[Prince Charmed]

Ik vond het echt een leuk verhaal om te lezen! Echt van die dingen die ze in de serie ook zouden zeggen/doen.

Ook leuk verhaal bedacht, met die steen in hem enzo, en dan die hele geschiedenis rond Keir, vind ik ook allemaal goed verzonnen

Je Engels is ook heel goed, het was goed te lezen..!!

Gelijk ook al het begin is leuk, en je wilt het gewoon gelijk verder lezen, en dat is echt goed..!!

Kortom, goed verhaal, leuke fantasie en ook leuk in de orginele taal, dat maakt het ook allemaal weer wat echter Goed gedaan

[Paigethecutest]

Prince said:

Ik vond het echt een leuk verhaal om te lezen! Echt van die dingen die ze in de serie ook zouden zeggen/doen.

Ook leuk verhaal bedacht, met die steen in hem enzo, en dan die hele geschiedenis rond Keir, vind ik ook allemaal goed verzonnen

Je Engels is ook heel goed, het was goed te lezen..!!

Gelijk ook al het begin is leuk, en je wilt het gewoon gelijk verder lezen, en dat is echt goed..!!

Kortom, goed verhaal, leuke fantasie en ook leuk in de orginele taal, dat maakt het ook allemaal weer wat echter Goed gedaan

Dank je, maar er zaten toch ook wel wat minder goede stukjes in?

[Prince Charmed]

Paigethecutest said:

Dank je, maar er zaten toch ook wel wat minder goede stukjes in?

Eigenlijk vind ik de personages die jij beschrijft allemaal erg 'In Character' , wat betekent dat de stukjes waar het even niet spannend is, toch ook nog heel leuk gedaan zijn, omdat ik vind dat de personages gewoon leuk beschreven zijn, dus blijft leuk om te lezen.

Je hebt wel af en toe eens een foutje in het Engels, als je dat bedoelt, maar daar lees je zo overheen.

[Paigethecutest]

Echt leuk dat iedereen zo enthousiast is.
Ook met Nederlands, we moesten laatst ons Leesdossier (of eigenlijk schrijfdossier) inleveren. Onze docent zei dat hij normaal gesproken nooit hoger dan een 8 geeft, tenzij het heel bijzonder is. Ik had een 8,5.

[Mariet]

Had je dit verhaal ingeleverd??? (vast niet voor nederlands maar kan tog)